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The chart below give information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The given chart gives information about the percentage of the British
people
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 in different age categories donating money to charity for the years
of
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apply
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1990 and 2010.
According to
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 the graph, it is evident that the English
people
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 gave
decent
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a decent
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 amount of money to the charity
in
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at
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 all ages. To be more clear, in 5 age groups, the smallest donation amount belonged to the youngest
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while
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, while
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 the highest portion was paid by the middle-aged
people
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 (former 18-25, almost 17%, letter 36-50, around 40% of the total share).
Furthermore
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, other remaining 3 age categories
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such
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, such
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 as 26-35, 51-65,
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and 65+
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65+
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65+,
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 have
the
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apply
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moderate and similar quantities away
–
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32%, 35%, 33%. As for the donations made in 2010, the higher amounts were paid by elderly
compared
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people compared
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 to younger
people
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. To be more precise, the youngest group contributed only 6
percent
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per cent
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 of
total
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the total
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 donation
which
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, which
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 was 6 times less than ones made by 65+
people
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.
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, the rest not-mentioned groups (26-35,36-50,51-65) supported with their 23%,35% and 40% donations.
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, it can be clearly seen that middle-aged adults donated more to the community based on the highest figure when in 2010,
people
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 between 51 and 65
peaked
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reached
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the
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their
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contribution
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peak contribution
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 with just under 40%

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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