The diagrams show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams illustrate changes in the
area
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surrounding Queen Mary Hospital over a forty-year period, from its construction in 1960 to 2000.
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, it can be seen that in 1960 the
area
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consisted mainly of a
market
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and agricultural land, alongside the hospital and a car park.
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, over the following decades, the
market
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and farmland, which were unrelated to the hospital, were replaced by medical facilities connected to healthcare services. In 1960, the
area
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was divided into four main sections
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a
market
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, farmland, a car park, and the hospital itself. By 1980, significant development had taken place, with a pharmacy, a cancer centre, and a nursing school being established in place of the
market
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and farmland.
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, by 2000, the cancer centre had been expanded, occupying space previously used for the nursing school and part of the car park.
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, the diagrams show that the hospital surroundings gradually transformed into a more health-focused
area
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, with additional medical institutions
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as the pharmacy and nursing school being introduced.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words area, market with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • initial facilities
  • replacement
  • significant extension
  • absorbed
  • developments
  • introduction
  • adjacent
  • evolution
  • enhancing healthcare services
  • commercial spaces
  • medical facilities
  • expansion
  • modern healthcare needs
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