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The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below illustrates
a
Correct article usage
the
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 place of birth of humans living in Australia
and
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, and
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 the table below
inform
Correct subject-verb agreement
informs
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people
Use synonyms
 born in these countries live.
Overall
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, we can say that there is over a quarter of foreigners live in Australia
and
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, and
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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most of them prefer cities
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that
Correct determiner usage
the
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countrysides
Fix the agreement mistake
countryside
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. Observing the table, we can state that nearly all Chinese are living in towns, which is the biggest percentage,
compering
Verb problem
compared
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 to other nations who
also
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 live there. Dutch
people
Use synonyms
 are
also
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 not far from asians. Nine-tenths are living in cities
and
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, and
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thats
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that's
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 a little more than
British
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the British
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. At that time, migrants
fron
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from
 New Zealand and local
people
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have
Wrong verb form
had
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higher
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a higher
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 rate of individuals who live in rural areas
compering
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compared
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 to other countries. They
also
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 have bigger numbers who
lives
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live
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 in the city, but it's lower than
Chinese
Correct article usage
the Chinese
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 or Dutch, or British. The conclusion is that more
people
Use synonyms
 prefer cities.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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