The bar chart showed the percentage of school children learning to play four different musical instruments (violin, guitar, piano, drums) in 2005, 2010, 2015.

The bar charts give information about the percentage of school children learning to play four different musical instruments (violin, guitar, piano, drums) during the period from 2005 to 2015.
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the four instruments exhibited different trends over the given period, three followed an upward trajectory,
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the other one showed a decline.
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, the rates of increase and decrease varied significantly between them. As the bar chart shows, in 2005, Piano started at slightly over 10% and rose moderately to 20% in 2010, before rising drastically, reaching around 40% by 2015.
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, Guitar stood at 10% in 2005 and grew gradually to slightly under 20% in 2010.
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, it jumped dramatically to just above 40%
at the end
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of the period.
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, Drums began at nearly 5% in 2005 and stayed
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same pattern until 2010.
Thereafter
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, climbed rapidly to slightly under 10% by 2015.
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, it commenced at around 10% in 2005 and dropped slowly to approximately 8% in 2010, before falling considerably to reach around 5% by 2015.

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