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Not enough student around the world choose to study science subjects at the university. What are the reasons for this? What impact does this issue have on society? Give your reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Introduction
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In
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cience subjucts
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science subjects
 at university are
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fewer
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before
, there are
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logical
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behind
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cause
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these
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choices
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examples
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Body · 1
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there
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factors
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students
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avoid
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science
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subjucts
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subjects
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major
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the major
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reason
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reasons
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students
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science
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requered
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requires
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 hard effort and more
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precision
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energy
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studens
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students
prefer
study
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to study
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subject
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subjects
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can be
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are
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 easy and
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less
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fewer
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,
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society
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flexible
 bath and more enjoyable
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because
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deal
 with
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humans instead
 of
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animals
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things
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Body · 2
On the other hand
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scinece
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science
 subjects
can
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have
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less
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fewer
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job
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opportinties
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opportunities
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student
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students
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science
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have
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partically
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particular
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ways
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 and less chance to
employ
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 in a good career
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numerouse
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job
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jobs
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that
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apply
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related
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to
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 subject offer
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risks
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are takled
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takled
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tackled
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difficult
 issues
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.
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student
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Students
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 who
graduated
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graduate
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 from these
supjects
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subjects
 will spend more time
search
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searching
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 for
suitibale
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suitable
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job
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jobs
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therefore
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therefore,
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student
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students
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 tend to
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choose subjects
 that
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have various
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opportenties
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opportunities
, like
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medicine
,
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engineering
, and law
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,
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which
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promesed
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promise
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graduates
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 by employing them in
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perfect
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job
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jobs
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 with pay
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raises
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Conclusion
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conclusion
, studying
science
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become
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has become
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 less interesting
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for
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a lot
 of universities
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around
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due to
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socity
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society
, economy , and other reasons .But it can be
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a good
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 option for some
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student
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students
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so
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, so
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this
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 subject should not
englected
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be excluded
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.

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structure
Plan the essay before you write. State your view in one sentence at the start. Then give 2 or 3 clear reasons and say how they affect society. Finish with a short conclusion.
coherence
Use clear links between ideas. Start each paragraph with a main idea. Use simple links like and, but, also, for example to show how ideas go together.
language
Use simple, correct words and short sentences. Check spelling and use the right word for each idea. Try to stay near 100 common words.
content
You try to answer both parts of the task.
structure
There is a short ending that restates the idea.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • perception
  • lucrative
  • prestige
  • devaluation
  • scientific literacy
  • career prospects
  • resources
  • support
  • mentorship
  • cultural attitudes
  • engagement
  • interest
  • complexity
  • challenges
  • community impact
  • innovation
  • future workforce
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