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You have recently moved to a new city. Write a letter to your friend and invite them to visit you. In your letter: •Tell them about your new home •Describe the city and what they can do there •Suggest a time for their visit

Dear Adham, I hope you are well. I am writing to tell you
good
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 news. I have just moved
in to
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into
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 my new
apartment
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 in New
York
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.
the
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apartment
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 is comfortable and big
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. spices
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spices in
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apartment
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 im my
apartment
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 have
new
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a new
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playstation
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PlayStation
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 5 . New
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york
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York
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is
very
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a very
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beautifull
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beautiful
 city views and very
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 builts in New
york
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 .
adham
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Adham
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, i
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i
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I
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 invite you new
york
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 to my new
apartment
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you
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You
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 can come anytime you want
and
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 we can explore the whole day together

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structure
Use one idea per paragraph and put similar ideas together. This helps the reader follow you.
grammar
Fix grammar and spell words. Capitalize New York and Dear at the start. Use 'I have moved into' and 'in New York'.
vocabulary
Spell common words right and use simple forms. Try 'the apartment is big and comfy' and 'you can visit anytime' with correct spacing.
tone
Greeting is present and the letter has a friendly tone.
content
The letter states the move and invites a visit.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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