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Band 4

You rent a flat with your friend who is moving out. It is too expensive for you to pay the rent alone.Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter: •explain the situation •describe why you would like to stay in this flat •ask the landlord if you can find another flatmate

Dear Mr Jonathan, My purpose of writing
this
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 letter is the rental payment. My roommate
who
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 is living with
me
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me,
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 is now moving out for personal problems. Living alone is good ,
however
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, four rooms for me being so expensive in my case.
Moreover
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, grocery costs will be high. May you take down the costs of the flat for me, as I cannot imagine
outcomes
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 for a month. Plus,
Iam
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I am
 just a student in one of the local universities
which
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, which
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 is located in the city centre. For these reasons , please lower the prices. Look forward to hearing from you soon, Your sincerely.

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structure
Use a clear plan. Open with the reason, then say why you want to stay, and end with a request to have a new flatmate. Make each idea in its own line.
content
Clearly ask to allow you to find another flatmate as you need. Include a line that you will find a new person to share the rent.
grammar
Fix grammar and word order. Use simple forms: 'I am', 'rent', 'flat', 'look forward to hearing from you'.
content
Be exact about the rent and the effect of a new flatmate. Say how much you can pay with a new person.
format
Close with a polite line and proper sign-off: 'Yours sincerely,'
language
Check spell and capitalization: 'Dear Mr Jonathan' is okay, but 'Iam' should be 'I am'.
greeting
The letter has a greeting and a close.
content
The writer shows the need to stay in the flat.
content
The message says money is tight.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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