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t is admittedly true that, education systems are changing rapidly. Some people support online education, while others prefer traditional classroom learning. Both views have your opnions.

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education
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 systems are changing rapidly. Some people support online
education
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 others prefer traditional classroom learning. Both views have strong reasons. On the one hand,Online
education
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 offers flexibility and convenience.
Students
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 can attend classes from home and manage their study time easily.
According to
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 The Daily Star, online learning has helped many
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 continue their
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, especially those living far from educational institutions.Student
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learning
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 can attend classes of
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world-famous
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 and
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learn
 from their sitting at home.
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, traditional classroom learning provides direct interaction between
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 and
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. Editorials in Prothom Alo often mention that
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face
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 learning helps
students
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 understand lessons better and develop discipline and social skills.
when
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 they do not understand their
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lessons
 ask their question
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teachers
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teacher provides homework
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 their
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problems
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,not only
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students
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 to
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 but
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teachers
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and
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 could be friendly. In my opinion, traditional classroom
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 is more effective for most
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. Direct guidance from
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 plays an important role in quality
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grammar
Fix many spell and word mistakes so your text is clear.
structure
Plan before you write. Start with a short intro that says what you will talk about, then two body parts, then a short ending.
coherence
Use simple link words to show order and add ideas, like first, then, but, also.
content
Add more real facts or clear examples to back each idea.
conclusion
End with a short closing line that restates your view.
style
Keep sentences short. Do not write long run on lines.
structure
You show two sides and give your view.
coherence
You use 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' to show two sides.
content
Your ending explains your view.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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