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The chart shows the minimum number of days spent per week on sport and exercise by young people in Canada. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The bar chart displays the amount of time that young people spent per
week
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 on sport and exercise in Canada.
Overall
Linking Words
,
thats
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that's
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 clear from the chart
young
Punctuation problem
: young
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women
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 are less active than young
men
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 in their leisure time. One
on
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apply
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hand,young
men
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 participate in sports about 97% at least 1 day a
week
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 ,
while
Linking Words
 young
women
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 they just 85% at least 1 day.
Morever
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Moreover
 
half
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, half
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 of young
men
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they
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apply
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participate in sports at least 3 days a
week
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.
One
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On
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another
Correct determiner usage
the
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hand
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other hand
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, 1 in 5
of
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apply
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young
men
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they
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apply
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participate at least 6 days a
week
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,
while
Linking Words
 young
women
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 only a quarter
o
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of
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 them
at
Verb problem
participate at
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 least 6 days a
week
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,there
Punctuation problem
. There
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 are
alots
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a lot
 of questions still now about how young
men
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deffrent
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differ
than
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from
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 young
women
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 in
sports
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the sports
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 field.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words week, women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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