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The graph compares employment rates in three sectors of the economy, in the UK, 2000-2010. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates the comparison of working status based on three substantial economic factors in Britain for a decade.
Overall
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, people tend to believe that being an employee in the public sector is more secure than the private one,
as well as
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,
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 people who work as entrepreneurs. Public service is more popular starting in 2003 to 2010 , reaching about 50. If we look at more details, we will find that the intersection between civil servants and corporations in 2003 by about 40.
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, it
also
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 happened for self employed and the private sector from 2007 to 2008. The capital sector declined dramatically from around 50 to 20 throughout the year , by more than 50%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment rates
  • sectors of the economy
  • upward trend
  • growth
  • stable rate
  • fluctuations
  • decline
  • services sector
  • industrial sector
  • agricultural sector
  • escalating
  • consistently
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • decade
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