The graph below shows changes in global food and oil prices between 2000 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph
summarizes
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summarises
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trends
about
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in
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the costs of
foods
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food
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and oil between 2000 and 2011. From an
overall
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view, both products have a gradual
increase
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over
time
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time,
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followed by a sharp decline and a subsequent
increase
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over
this
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time period. Food prices progressively
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increase
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increased
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from 2000 to 2007, reaching a peak of about 220 Food
price
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Price
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Index
,
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apply
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between 2008 and 2009.
Afer
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this
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time
period
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period,
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there is a sharp decline, with a minimum of 140
points
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points,
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followed by some fluctuations between 2009 and 2010, and a subsequent sharp
increase
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. Average oil prices
has
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have
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a similar trend. Its food prices index gradually increases from 2000 to 2008,
reaches
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reaching
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a peak (about 230 points) in 2008.
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Therefore
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Oil costs have an abrupt decline, with a zenith of almost 115 points during 2009, followed by a rapid
increase
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with some fluctuations between 2009 and 2011.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words increase with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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