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The diagram below shows how energy is produced from coal. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The picture illustrates the stages and processes of the production of electricity.
Overall
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, there are many procedures that are taken into account
of
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for
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 changing coal to energy.
Firstly
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, trucks are delivering many loads of coal
at
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to
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 the site,
while
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 oxygen is
also
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 pumped into the blast furnace.
Additionally
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, after the air is mixed with black
coal
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coal,
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 it comes out through the bottom surface of the chamber as
a
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apply
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slag.
However
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, there is
gas
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a gas
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 turbine and a generator that produces power to turn the turbine to purify syngas.To add on,
steam
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a steam
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 turbine recovers heat loss through a steam generator at the same time, excess flue gases
comes
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come
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 out over the chimney of a taller chamber.
On the other hand
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, in the furnace, there is
removal
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a removal
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 process that can make water,
mecury
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mercury
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as
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, as
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 well as sulfur.Water is going to be used by the local community close
by
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to
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energy
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the energy
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 production site.As
this
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 process
taking
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takes
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 place,
expert
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the expert
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 will investigate all the stages and make sure that they produce high voltage
of
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apply
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electricity.
Finally
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, if the energy does not have
power
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power,
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 the company will
be not
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not be
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 guaranteed to run for a long
.
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time.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • extraction
  • preparation plant
  • impurities
  • conveyor belt
  • turbine
  • generator
  • high-pressure steam
  • boiler
  • cooling tower
  • emissions
  • environmental impact
  • scrubbers
  • closed-loop system
  • condenser
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