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The Table Shows the Proportion of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009. Summarise the Information by Selecting and Reporting the Main Points and Give Comparisons Where Relevant.

The table illustrates the proportion of pupils attending four different types of secondary
schools
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 over a nine-year period, from 2000 to 2009.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 Community
Schools
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 were the only category to experience a significant upward trend, eventually becoming the most popular school type.
Conversely
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, the other three institutions saw their student percentages decline, with Voluntary-controlled
Schools
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 witnessing the most substantial drop. In 2000, Voluntary-controlled
Schools
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 dominated the educational landscape, accounting for over half of the student population at 52%.
However
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,
this
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 figure plummeted to 38% in 2005 and continued to fall, reaching only 20% by 2009.
Similarly
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, Grammar
Schools
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 saw a steady decrease, starting at 24% and finishing at exactly half that rate (12%) by the end of the period.
By contrast
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, Community
Schools
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 showed a remarkable surge in attendance. After starting at a modest 12% in 2000, the proportion nearly tripled to 32% in 2005, before peaking at 58% in 2009—the highest percentage recorded for any school type during the period. Meanwhile, Specialist
Schools
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 remained the most stable category;
although
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 they started at the same level as Community
Schools
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 (12%), they only experienced a marginal decline, ending at 10% in 2009.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words schools with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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