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In the past most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantage and disadvantage of living in a small community?

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However
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However,
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 now
people
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living
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live
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 mostly in large urban cities
,
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;
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 some time ago, small rural villages were very common in many countries. Both
variation
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variations
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 of areas have
a
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apply
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drawbacks and
a
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positive aspects,
while
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 I believe that
a
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the
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 benefits of the small communities
overweigh
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outweigh
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the negetive
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negetive
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negative
part
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parts
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.
Firstly
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,
close-knit
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a close-knit
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 community provides
sense
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a sense
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 of belonging.Which means that in small villages
people
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 know each other since
a
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apply
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childhood,
therefor
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therefore
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 they have stability of knowing
people
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 who they are
surround
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 by,
as a result
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, they
are feeling
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feel
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 themselves as a part of
this
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 space and rarely
struggling
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struggle
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 with
a
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an
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 identity
crisi
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crisis
.
For instance
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, there is a small town accounted for around 10000 citizens called Svitlovodsk in Ukraine. I've been living there for one year, and the first fact that you
are noticing
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notice
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, in
a
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apply
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contrast to the huge urban areas, is that
people
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 are more willing to help
neighbor
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neighbours
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, don't have
problem
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problems
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 with communication and
always can
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can always
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 recommend somebody to solve your problem.
As a result
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, they feel more confident being
nearby
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near
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 each other. It
is
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apply
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also
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have
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has
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opposite
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the opposite
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 effect, the smaller the village, the more developed
cult
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the cult
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 of reputation. If
person
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a person
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 treated someone in a small city, everyone
is knowing
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knows
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 that in a few hours.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, it is much
easily
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easier
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 to
lost
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lose
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 the reputation
,
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apply
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then
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than
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build
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to build
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 it again from
the
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apply
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scratch.
Moreover
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, in many communities where there are no second chances, and person who was
fould
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found
 is going to be lonely or be forced to move to
the
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a
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 new place.
To conclude
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, from my perspective
living
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, living
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 in the small communities
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is benefitial
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benefitial
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beneficial
 for the individuals in terms of
inclusion
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inclusion,
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that
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which
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help
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helps
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people
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 be valuable and
doing
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do
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 something meaningful for the group.
However
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, there is always a place for
negetive
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negative
 aspects like being excluded from it.

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improvement
Explain your ideas with full and clear reason. Add more detail for each point.
structure
Make a clear plan: intro with opinion, one body on good sides, one body on bad sides, and a short conclusion.
grammar
Write in simple, correct sentences. Check grammar and spelling.
content
Use examples that fit your point and explain how they show it.
idea
You state a clear position that small communities have benefits.
evidence
You give a specific example (Svitlovodsk) to back your point.
balance
You mention both good and bad points.
Fully explain your ideas

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