The diagram below shows how the water cycle works. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram provides information about the systematic process of the
water
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cycle.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the cycle repeats itself time after time, and it has 2 main stages
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cloud formation ,
rain
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, and groundwater movement.
Initially
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,
due to
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the sun’s heat,
water
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from the seas, lakes, and rivers evaporates, and it is carried across land by the wind. After that, because of transpiration from plants and trees, the
vapors
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begin to cool down
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clouds are
initially
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formed. The clouds are
then
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blown by the wind
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and are cooled
further
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in the process, causing
rain
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.
Moreover
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,
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rain
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rainwater
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water
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gets absorbed into the Porous rock, entering the
ground waters
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groundwater
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, and flowing into lakes, rivers and seas. The liquid gets stuck at that level because it can not sink
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than the Non-porous rock.
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, the
rain
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supplies lakes
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and rivers with
water
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, which is carried downstream by the river into the sea, and the cycle repeats itself again.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, initially".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, rain with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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