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The bar chart below shows the top ten counties for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

This
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 chart compares the
amount
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 of generation and
consumption
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 of
electricity
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 in ten
countries
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 in
2014
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2014,
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 measured
by
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in
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 billion kWh.
Overall
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, China and the US had the largest
elcetricity
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electricity
consumption
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 and
production
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 figures. In all
contries
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countries
, except Germany, the
amount
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 of
electricity
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 produced was more than their
electricity
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consumption
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. Regarding
chart
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the chart
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, the largest
consumption
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 and
production
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 of
electricity
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accounted
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is accounted
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 for
China
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by China
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. The US and Russia
and
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, and
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 Japan were the second and third
and
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, and
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 fourth
countries
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 in
electricity
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consumption
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 and
production
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. The
amount
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 of
electricity
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 that was produced by these
countries
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 was 4099, 1057, 936.2 billion kWh
respectively
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, respectively
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. For the rest of
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countries
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the countries
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, they had
amlost
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almost
 the same
amount
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 of
consumption
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 and
production
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 of
electricity
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. India and Canada
and
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, and
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 France ranked in fifth and sixth
and
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, and
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 seventh, the highest
electricity
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producer
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producers
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 and
consumer
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consumers
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 in 2014. Their
consumption
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 was almost 871, 618.9, 561.2
respectively
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, respectively
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. For the rest of
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countries
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the countries
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, Brazil, Germany, and Korea
republic
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apply
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produced 530.7, 526.6,
485.1
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and 485.1
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, consumption, electricity, countries, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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