The line graph below shows the number of cell phone subscribers in a particular city, by gender.

The line graph illustrates the changes in the number of cell phone users in a specific city over a twenty-year period, starting from 1995, categorised by gender.
Overall
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, both genders saw a substantial increase in phone subscriptions over the two decades. Notably,
while
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women
initially
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had higher numbers, male subscribers experienced more rapid growth and eventually surpassed females to become the largest user group by the end of the period. In 1995, the number of female subscribers stood slightly higher at approximately 550, compared to 500 for men. Female subscriptions
then
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grew significantly, peaking at 2,500 in 2005.
However
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,
this
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figure saw a moderate decline over the following five years before stabilising at just over 2,300 users by 2015.
In contrast
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, the number of male account holders followed a different trajectory. After a sharp climb to match the female total of 2,500 in 2005, the male figure levelled off briefly. Between 2010 and 2015,
however
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, it surged again, reaching a peak of approximately 2,700.
Consequently
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, men finished the period as the dominant group of cell phone subscribers.

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