IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The table below shows the estimated literacy rates by region and gender for 2000 and 2004.

The table depicts the analysis of
Use synonyms
proportion
Correct article usage
the proportion
show examples
 of educated people by area and sex from 2000 to 2004.
Overall
Linking Words
, it can be seen that there are five major continents
showed
Wrong verb form
shown
show examples
 in
table
Correct article usage
the table
show examples
.Europe has
highest
Correct article usage
the highest
show examples
 ratio of
Use synonyms
litracy
Correct your spelling
literacy
 and Africa has
lowest
Correct article usage
the lowest
show examples
 percentage
as compare
Change preposition
compared
show examples
 to other continents. Europe has the greatest ratio of
Use synonyms
litracy
Correct your spelling
literacy
 with
total
Correct article usage
a total
show examples
98.8
Change preposition
of 98.8
show examples
% in which
Use synonyms
women's
Check wording
women
show examples
 have 98.5% and men have
morethan
Correct your spelling
more than
women
Use synonyms
which
Punctuation problem
, which
show examples
 was 99.2%.
Use synonyms
Proportion
Correct article usage
The proportion
show examples
 between Americans and
Ocenians
Correct your spelling
Oceaniens
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
show examples
approximatly
Correct your spelling
approximately
same
Correct article usage
the same
show examples
with
Punctuation problem
, with
show examples
 94.2% and 94.1% in men
repectively
Correct your spelling
respectively
Punctuation problem
, as
show examples
as
Correct word choice
and
show examples
 92.7% and 93.2%
,
Punctuation problem
apply
show examples
 in
women
Use synonyms
's in both countries
with
Punctuation problem
, with
show examples
 the sum of 93.4% in
women
Use synonyms
's and 93.6% in men respectively. In Asia and world
Use synonyms
litracy
Correct your spelling
literacy
 there was
also
Linking Words
 not a huge difference, world and Asia
Use synonyms
litracy
Correct your spelling
literacy
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
show examples
 79.3% and 82.2% in total
respectively
Punctuation problem
, respectively
show examples
.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, in
gents
Check wording
the Gentlemen
show examples
 of Asia and
Correct article usage
the World
show examples
World
Add a comma
World,
show examples
 the
proportion
Use synonyms
 was 85.9% and 77.3% respectively
Linking Words
as
Punctuation problem
, as
show examples
 well as in
Correct article usage
the famale
show examples
famale
Correct your spelling
female
Use synonyms
proportion
Punctuation problem
proportion,
show examples
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
show examples
 was 77.3% and 72.5% respectively. In Europe, the
proportion
Use synonyms
 of
leteracy
Correct your spelling
literacy
 was
sum
Check wording
apply
show examples
98.8%, 99.2% in males and 98.5% in females.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, litracy, women with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: