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Band 2

More and more plastic waste has polluted cities, countryside’s, and oceans. What problems does it cause and what measures can be taken?

Hello
Punctuation problem
Hello,
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 Sir or Madam I am writing
this
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 to inform you that I am very disappointed with the product I recently bought from your company. Actually,a week ago, I ordered a hair
dryer
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 from your brand. I wanted to buy
this
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since
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for
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long
Correct article usage
a long
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 time because every time, I used to get late for my important meetings. As my hair
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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 not so fine, so hair
dryer
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 is
must
Correct article usage
a must
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 for them. After a couple of days, it got delivered to my home. When I opened the package, I was so devastated to see that the cable of
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dryer
Correct article usage
the dryer
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 was broken. It made me feel so sad, because I had to go to my
friends's
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friend's
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 birthday party. My mood got spoiled after getting the
dryer
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 in
such
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condition
Correct article usage
a condition
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. I request
you
Correct word choice
that you
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to
Verb problem
apply
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either refund my money or exchange the item. I hope you will cooperate with me. Thank you Yours sincerely Beerpal

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task
Add order date and order number, model name, and a clear request for a refund or exchange.
coherence
Put the most clear point in the start and keep ideas in a good order. Use linking words to join ideas.
grammar
Fix grammar: - 'Actually, a week ago' (space after comma) - 'hair is' not 'hair are' - 'my friend\'s birthday party' - 'cable was broken' - be more formal in line like 'I would like to request a refund or exchange'.
tone
Use a formal tone. Say 'I would like to request a refund or exchange' and end with 'Yours sincerely'.
content
Polite tone and clear aim to seek a refund or exchange
structure
Greeting and closing are used
content
Says the problem and how it hurts the user
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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