The line graph shows the percentage of spending in a European country from 1960 to 2000

The line graph illustrates the data about the proportion of household expenditure allocated to 5 divergent categories in a European country between 1960 and 2000.
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, spending on transport noticeably grew over the period,
whereas
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the expenditure on others showed a downward trend. In 1960, food accounted
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32%, making it by far the dominant figure.
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, it decreased gradually to about 30% in 1970 and
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more significantly to around 20% in 1990, before dropping to 13% by 2000. Leisure spending followed
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trajectory, falling from 20% in 1960 to just over 10% in the final year.
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, clothing expenditure experienced a steady decline from 10% to nearly
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55%
over the same period of time. Energy showed
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the lowest
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indications throughout, in the first and
last
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years
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it represented 5% and 1%, respectively.
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, transport was the only category to rise consistently, increasing from about 8% in 1960 to 15% in 2000, surpassing the leisure and food
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the end of the span.

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