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Writing Samples
Band 4

Public transport is essential but problematic. Describe some of the problems connected to public transport and suggest some solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Public transport became an integral part of our
life
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lives
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. Every day we use public
transports
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transport
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 like
bus
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buses
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, trains,
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and subway
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subway
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subways
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. Most
of
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apply
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people prefer them because they help us to save our money and travel faster.
Linking Words
Also
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Also,
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 it has environmental benefits.
Number
Correct article usage
The number
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 of cars on the road would be less
and
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, and
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 it helps to save the air quality. But it
have
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has
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 the problems which discourage the desire to ride them.

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structure
The plan is not clear. Add a short plan at the start and a short end. Prefer order: problem, fix, end.
content
You speak about the good point of public transport. Now add two clear problems with a bit of detail and give two fixes for each.
structure
Use simple link words to connect ideas: first, next, also, but, finally. Keep ideas in the same order.
language
Check small grammar changes to be clear, like 'Most people' instead of 'Most of people' and 'public transport' not 'transports'.
content
The idea that public transport saves money and helps the air is clear.
content
The opening shows the topic well and keeps focus on public transport.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • emissions
  • inequality
  • congestion
  • economic feasibility
  • subsidies
  • infrastructure
  • overcrowding
  • commute
  • incentivize
  • service quality
  • reinvest
  • equitable access
  • fiscal responsibility
  • peak hours
  • public subsidy
  • taxpayer burden
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