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People today move to new cities or new countries more than ever before. What challenges do they experience? What strategies are there to meet these challenges? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant ideas from your own knowledge or experience.

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life
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lot of individuals are migrating to various states in
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such
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search
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 of good education and a
better paying
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jod
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job
 in order to sustain
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one's
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 living
starndards
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standards
 and achieve
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the
life
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 goals set in place.
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 as looking for greener pastures has its benefits, there are various drawbacks that come with it. To start with, communication barrier plays a vital role in creating problems with natives of a foreign
country
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. A
country
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 like Germany, passing information from a foreigner
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 a citizen becomes a very big challenge
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 leading to misunderstanding and later
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failed
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task.Racism is another big issue in
foreign
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 land . Many netizens look down upon
non residents
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non-residents
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 with bad eyes and fail to give them the best of
life
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 there.
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, Juliet, my friend, who had just travelled to India to
further
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 her studies in medicine quit often got negative attention from indian
citizen
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 because of her
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 since she came from Africa.
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much
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 problems
foreigners
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 face , there is always a way of making
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life
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 much better living in a different
country
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.
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 major solution in cases of
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 barrier is to come up with
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 classes so that the person travelling can
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have
 basic knowledge and know how to communicate once they are there.
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for
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 example,
foreigners
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 who ought to travel to
germany
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Germany
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 for either school or work have to study
germany
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 first before landing there and have a certificate of the
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 as
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proof. In cases of racism, netizens of a
country
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 should be taught
on
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the importance of
foreigners
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 and understand that each and every person is created in the image and likeness of God and no
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 is more important than the other ,we all need each other in order to
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.In
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for
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 they teach people of importance of obe
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others
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and
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this
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 takes place both in churches and schools
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foreigners
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 who are there study and work
at
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 peace and harmony. To sum it up,each and every person interested
to travel
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in travelling
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 to a foreign
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 should check its basic
language
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and
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 in cases of
different
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a different
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language
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one
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 should learn it in order to have ease
while
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 moving around in an exotic nation.

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structure
The plan is not clear. Try to make a plan with three parts: intro, body, and end. In each body paragraph put one main idea and a small example.
cohesion
Link ideas from one sentence to the next with simple words like 'also', 'but', 'then'. This helps the flow.
content
Give a real and clear example for each main idea. Explain how the example shows the challenge or fix.
language
Watch for spelling and form. Short, clean sentences are easier to read and show you use simple word.
idea
The essay shows an attempt to cover both problems and fixes.
structure
There is a clear end with a short sum up.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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