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Band 4.5

You are going on a short training course at a college in Sydney, Australia. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter: Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter: explain your situation describe the accommodation you require say when you will need it You do NOT need to write any address.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter in order to get help with the student residence of your college in Sydney
as
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i
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I
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 will be coming there in
next
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the next
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 two weeks
and
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i
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I
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 don't have any contacts to get
one
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 place to stay. To start with, I have been enrolled in the Hospitality course at Georgian
college
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College
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 for
summer
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the summer
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 intake. I have paid the semester fees
as well as
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 my flight ticket. Since
,
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apply
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i
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I
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 am travelling for the first
time
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time,
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i
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I
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 don't have any contacts
overthere
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over there
. I will be coming
alone
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alone,
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 so
i
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I
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 am looking for a small
bachelore
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bachelor's
 suite which has its
personal
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own
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 laundry.
Morover
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Moreover
,
i
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I
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 am
also
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 not well known
by
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 the college area
so
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it
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I
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 would be really grateful if you
can
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could
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 provide me a room
as
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at
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the
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a
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cheap
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low
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price
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price,
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 as
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 can see many options. I will need it by 19th April
and
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I
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 am willing to provide my card details if needed
along with
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 my student ID number. Thanks for your consideration
and
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 hope to hear from you soon. Yours Sincerely Jay Chawla

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task achievement
State your need in a clear line at the start of the letter.
coherence
Keep each paragraph about one main idea.
tone
Use a polite and formal tone all through.
grammar
Fix big errors like I, capital letters, and spelling.
task
Be clear about the date you need the room.
tone
The letter starts with a formal opening.
content
It asks for help with a place to stay and says when you need it.
tone
There is a closing phrase to end politely.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation
  • officer
  • training course
  • require
  • private room
  • shared space
  • location preference
  • amenities
  • duration
  • internet access
  • complimentary breakfast
  • close proximity
  • available options
  • request
  • formal inquiry
  • short-term stay
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