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Writing Samples
Band 4

Environmental problems are too big for individual countries or individual people to address. In the other word, we have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environment is at an international level. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Environmental problems are considered
as
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apply
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a big issue for both
country
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the country
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 and
people
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the people
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 individually. At
this
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point
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point,
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 we have reached a level
that
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where
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 the only
manner
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way
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 to protect
this
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 is at an international level. I completely agree with the above notion and
therfore
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therefore
 present some valid points.
To begin
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population
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population,
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 there is
also
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 an increment in the pollution
on
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of
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air
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the air
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,water and land.
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, each country is facing
similar
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a similar
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 problem
and
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, and
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 the major source of
this
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 concern
are
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is
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 industries. In the name of
developping
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developing
, many new industries are
building
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being built
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 each year
and
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, and
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along with
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it
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it,
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 the small franchises are spreading all over the world.
Majority
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The majority
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from
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of
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this
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these
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 are the manufacturing ones, which emit a huge amount of wastage
which
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, which
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are
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is
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then
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further
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 released
in
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into
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 water bodies. As per the research, the sea of
the
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apply
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world
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world's
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has
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seas have
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 plenty of waste that it would take 1000 years to clean
it
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them
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.
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, the citizens are
also
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 becoming less aware of the cleanliness and
thus
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 their kids are eventually not learning how to maintain a proper ecosystem. In each
place
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place,
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 almost
everywhere
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everywhere,
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 there are garbage bins
but
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, but
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 still there are places where people are not made aware to use
it
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them
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 properly.
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, in
India
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India,
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 every year tons of garbage
is
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are
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 collected from the road itself, and strangely these are found next to the bins which
remains
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remain
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 empty. In conclusion,
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however
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however,
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this
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 issue has been considered at an international level
and
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, and
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therfore
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therefore
 many governments have started steps to resolve it sooner by working together. Many influencers are people
have
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who have
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 engaged to do
this
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 task and
did
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have done
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 many great job.

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task
Begin with a clear answer to the question and a short plan of what you will say.
structure
Make a new paragraph for each idea. Start with a topic sentence and add details or example.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas connect, like 'also', 'however', 'for example'.
examples
Give exact and small examples. Do not fill with long words or far facts.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling. Keep sentences short and clear.
planning
Plan before you write. write a quick outline of main points.
idea
The essay tries to link world issues to personal acts and to use an example from India.
structure
There is a conclusion that restates the view.
fact
Some facts and numbers are used to show the point.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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