The graph below shows the average monthly salary and the prices of black and white and colour TV in Japanese yen from 1953 to 1973.

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Mohammed M Al Faraj

Feb 14, 2026

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Average monthly salary
Black and white TV
Colour TV
Japanese Yen
Affordability
Upward/downward trend
Technological advancements
Consumer preferences
Price dynamics
Market changes
Increase/decrease
Ratio
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The graph below shows the average monthly salary and the prices of black and white and colour TV in Japanese yen from 1953 to 1973.

Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation?

People living in the 21st century have a better life quality than people who lived in previous times. to whta extent do you agree or disagree?

These days, people are forced to leave their family and friends in order to obtain a good job. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.