The graph below shows the average monthly salary and the prices of black and white and colour TV in Japanese yen from 1953 to 1973.

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Mohammed M Al Faraj

Feb 14, 2026

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Logical structure

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Average monthly salary
Black and white TV
Colour TV
Japanese Yen
Affordability
Upward/downward trend
Technological advancements
Consumer preferences
Price dynamics
Market changes
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