The graph below shows the average monthly salary and the prices of black and white and colour TV in Japanese yen from 1953 to 1973.

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Mohammed M Al Faraj

Feb 14, 2026

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Average monthly salary
Black and white TV
Colour TV
Japanese Yen
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Price dynamics
Market changes
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The graph below shows the average monthly salary and the prices of black and white and colour TV in Japanese yen from 1953 to 1973.

Topic 2: Scientists say that in the future, humanity will speak the same language. Do you think this is a positive or negative social development?

Some people believe that universities should only recruit young people with good school grades. Others believe that everyone should be given a chance regardless their age and school marks. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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