The graph below shows the average monthly salary and the prices of black and white and colour TV in Japanese yen from 1953 to 1973.

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salaries from 1950 to 1973

Mohammed M Al Faraj

Feb 14, 2026

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Average monthly salary
Black and white TV
Colour TV
Japanese Yen
Affordability
Upward/downward trend
Technological advancements
Consumer preferences
Price dynamics
Market changes
Increase/decrease
Ratio
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