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Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

In businesses, a skillset and knowledge packages owned by new
employees
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 will determine the success of
doing
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performing
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 some tasks. Various
skillset
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skillsets
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, both
harskill
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hard skills
 and
softskill
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soft skills
, need to be complemented and improved by new
employees
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. For
hardskill
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hard skills
, the competencies to solve a job with high quality
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 mandatory.
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, softskill which
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a
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skill
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skills
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 beyond
technical
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the technical
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aspect
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is
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also
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 crucial, mainly related to interpersonal
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skill
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skills
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. In
this
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 context, to build a strong foundation of those two
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skill
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skills
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 for new
employees
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 is
challengng
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challenging
 and
need
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needs
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 to be
match
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 with the industry needs. For new
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,
hardskill
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hard skills
 can be honed by building
the
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apply
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academic
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skill
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skills
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 from formal education.
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Nevertheless
,
softskill
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soft skills
 like interpersonal
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skill
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skills
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 need to be improved by
increasing
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gaining
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 a lot of
experiences
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experience
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.
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Lacking
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 basic interpersonal
skills
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 may
be
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occur
dute
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due
 to several reasons. First.
in
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 formal education, new
employees
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 only focus on how to accomplish a bundle of tasks and pass the exam. They do not follow and be active
on
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in
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 some events or
organization
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organisations
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, which can build
a
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apply
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connection
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connections
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 and cooperation with others that
related
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are related
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 to
improve
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improving
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 cooperative
skills
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.
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the
businesses
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business
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culture
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 with a varied generation and different age gaps can be difficult to face, especially for new
employees
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. They still can not fully adapt
with
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to
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 the new
culture
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.
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new
employees
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 usually do not have any
experiences
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experience
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 before joining the
businesses
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business
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so
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, so
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that
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they need some guidance and need to be accepted by old
employees
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. To face those challenges.
several
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Several
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 solutions can be implemented.
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to build a skillset of interpersonal-related
, new
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skills, new
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employees
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 can be more active in
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the organization
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organization
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organisation
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. They can be involved in many events and push to
organize
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organise
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 some roles so that they can have a responsibility to handle the
situation
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situations
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 which
need
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require
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an interpersonal-related
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interpersonal
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condition
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skills
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 and build some
connection
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connections
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 and improve the networking.
Second,
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employers can
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hold
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 a team building or an interpersonal-related class so that new
employees
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 can have a basic
skill
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 theory.
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new
employees
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 need to know and adapt the
culture
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from
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of
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businessess
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businesses
, and
also
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 build
a
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apply
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communication and strong
coordintion
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coordination
 with old
employees
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 with the new
culture
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 so their interpersonal
skill
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 is
also
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 improved. By designing and implementing those solutions, new
employees
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 can improve their basic interpersonal
skills
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, which
including
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include
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 cooperative
skills
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so
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, so
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 that they are better prepared
for
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to
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 face the tasks at hand.

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task response
State a clear view at the start and end with a brief summary of the main ideas.
task response
Give a direct answer to 'why' and 'how' questions, and add one or two real examples.
coherence
Organize into clear paragraphs: one for causes, one for solutions, and a short conclusion.
coherence
Use linking words to show flow between ideas, and keep sentences short.
language
Check grammar and spellings to avoid misreading.
content
Shows awareness that both hard and soft skills matter.
structure
Attempts to suggest practical actions like team activities.
examples
Uses examples from real work life to connect points.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interpersonal skills
  • cooperative skills
  • face-to-face interaction
  • digital communication
  • non-verbal cues
  • active listening
  • education system
  • technical knowledge
  • soft skills
  • remote work
  • work environment
  • comprehensive training programs
  • workshops
  • teamwork
  • role-playing scenarios
  • open communication
  • collaborative efforts
  • educational institutions
  • curriculums
  • hybrid work models
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