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Band 2

the plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today summeries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevent

The plans compare a public
park
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 transformed from 1920 to today. 
Overall
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, it’s clearly
observe
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observed
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 some change in the figure. There are some new facilities
such
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 as a cafe, a children’s play area, etc.
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, some of the original amenities have been
reorganized
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reorganised
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, like seats and the rose
garden
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.
However
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, it still has something
remain
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remaining
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on
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in
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 the same place,
such
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 as both entrances.  Originally, it had five seats in the
park
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; after construction, it has four seats and places around the rose
garden
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 at the
center
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centre
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 of the Grange
Park
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. It still has a number of facilities in the same place,
such
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 as the left corner rose
garden
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, and both entrances face ELDON street and ARNOLD street, respectively.  Today, it has some buildings under construction. The stage for musicians in the
left-center
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left-centre
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 of the
park
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 has become an amphitheatre for concerts,
while
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 the rose
garden
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 has
rebuilt
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been rebuilt
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to
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into
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cafe
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a cafe
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.
Also
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, the pond for water plants has become a children’s play area.
Their
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There
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has
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is
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 a new entrance via
underground
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the underground
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 car
park
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 on the right corner, or when visitors enter the
park
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, they can see another new
amenities
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amenity
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 water feature at the front

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Task response
Use a clear frame: start with a short line about what you will describe, then give an overview, then describe 1920 and today in order, and end with a brief compare.
Content
Be clear on the big changes and keep to one idea per sentence. Use 'before' and 'now' to show change.
Coherence
Link your ideas with small joining words like 'and', 'but', 'however', 'also' to help flow.
Grammar
Check grammar and word use. Use 'there were', 'it became', 'the pond changed to' instead of odd phrases.
Content
You name the new features like cafe and play area.
Organization
You show the time change with 'Originally' and 'Today'.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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