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Writing Samples
Band 5

You are planning to travel and would like someone to take care of your apartment while you are away. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter •explain why you will be away •ask your friend to take care of your apartment •describe the tasks you want your friend to do Begin your letter as follows: Dear……

I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I would like to thank you for your kind
offering
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offer
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 to take care of my house
while
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 I am
traveling
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travelling
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 to London. I will be away for 2 weeks for a business meeting.
Initially
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, I was worried about my cat Mubasa
and
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, and
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 I did not want to leave her at anybody else's place.
However
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, attending
meeting
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a meeting
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 is
also
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 important
and
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, and
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 I cannot miss it. I felt relieved when I heard that you
will
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would
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 come to handle everything for me. I have left all the necessary contact
list
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lists
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 for you in case of any emergency.
Such
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 as
,
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apply
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plumber's
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plumbers
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, security
guard's
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guards
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,
electrician's
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electricians's
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 and
veterinarian
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veterinarians
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numbers
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apply
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in the Orange diary at
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the dinning
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dinning
Use the right word
dining
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 table.
Moreover
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, please don't forget to water the plants twice a week.
Also
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, I would
appriciate
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appreciate
 it if you
can
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could
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 take my cat to her doctor on Saturday at 7:00 P.M.
Although
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 she is healthy, sometimes she gets sick when I am not around her.
Lastly
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, I could not thank you enough for your help. Please remember me whenever you need my help. Give my regards to your parents! With regards, Remma Sheikh

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task response
Task: You tell why you will be away, what to do at your home, and when. It is clear, but there are a few small spelling mistakes.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence: Put ideas in a better order. Start with why you go, then what to do, then a close. Use small linking words like and, also, then.
coherence and cohesion
Paragraphs: Break the text into short parts. A new idea should start a new paragraph.
tone
Tone: The tone is friendly. Keep polite thanks and good wishes.
lexical resource
Word choice: Use common words. Check spellings and be careful with long words. Move away from rare words.
tone
content
content
structure
The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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