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Band 4

In countries all over the world, the volume of road traffic is increasing at a faster rate than new roads are built. What are the causes of this problem? What are some potential solutions?

Globally,countries are experiencing traffic
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roads
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 at an increasing rate
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faster than
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 how new
roads
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are
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being built.
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 has led to a
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 of issues
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and
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 how the problems can be prevented
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goal
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 met. To start with, the cost effectiveness of purchasing a vehicle is quite affordable to people
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 the
low paid
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 person can afford a car
leading
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 to many people getting cars than the cost
incured
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incurred
 in
contructing
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constructing
 different routes because
toad
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 construction is far more expensive
that
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 getting a private vehicle.
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, in Uganda, a
lot
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netizens
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of netizens
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 own private vehicles because it is
affordable
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 leading to a
lot
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 of road traffic jams. To add on, poor
roads
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 play a vital role in creating jams.
Pot holed
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roads
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 ,rough terrain and dilapidated pathways cause a
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 of congestion.
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how
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drivers do not drive cautiously and carefully
causing
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 road
damages
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 and wrecking good
build
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pathways.
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, in Kenya, "matatu "operators drive carelessly
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hence
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 damaging
roads
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. There are
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 problems without solutions.
the
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 initial problem can be reduced by teaching the public
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 the importance of commuting with public means and encouraging the use of public transport. The latter problem can be curbed by proper use of taxes and by creating divergent
roads
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 to be used by
hig
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heavy
 and heavy vehicles like the one
tranporting
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transporting
 heavy metal and oil.Drivers
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 ought to be taught about careful driving and its benefits. In conclusion, to have good
roads
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 and reduce jams depends both on the
governent
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government
 and motorists to work hand in hand to create
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good moving conditions upon using
roads
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organization
Structure the essay in a clear way. Start with a short intro that state the topic. Then two body parts: causes and solutions. End with a short conclusion.
grammar
Use simple and correct grammar. Fix spelling errors and wrong words. E.g., road not toad, netizens not needed, pot-holed is one word.
development
Explain each point more. Show why a cheap car adds to traffic. Give more detail on solution steps and who should act.
content
The essay tries to cover causes and solutions.
content
Some real place examples are used to show points.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic
  • road
  • population
  • vehicles
  • convenience
  • economic
  • develop
  • afford
  • shopping
  • delivery
  • public transport
  • reliable
  • drive
  • urban planning
  • congestion
  • narrow
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