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Band 2.5

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email ·recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn ·explain how your friend could learn this sport ·suggest that you both learn this sport together

Hi Luke How are you? I hope you are doing well. I am glad that you wondered how to learn a new sport and asked me for some suggestions. As we've known each other for a long
while
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, I think no one understands you more than I do! I definitely believe that
the
Correct article usage
apply
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tennis
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 is quite suitable for you. Because I know you like running, and playing
tennis
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 requires an excellent ability
of running
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to run
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;
Also
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, you told me that you prefer to exercise
along
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alone
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,
instead
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 of in
group
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a group
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. The reason why I recommend
you
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apply
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the
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apply
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tennis
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 is
because
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that
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 I just started playing it recently. I joined a
tennis
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 club a couple
months
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of months
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 ago, they provide a great course with
qualified
Correct article usage
a qualified
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 coach;
Also
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, people there are nice and willing to share how to improve your skill, I think
this
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 is
friendly
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a friendly
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 environment for
beginner
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beginners
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. I really look forward
you to
Correct word order
to you
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 joining the club as well, and we can enjoy
practicing
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practising
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 together. I believe it will be a great experience! Thank you for contacting me
,
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.
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 hope to hear from you soon! Best wishes Chris

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language
Use simple and clear sentence. Some rules and words are wrong. Fix errors like tennis without 'the' and 'a' with 'to' after 'look forward'
coherence
Link ideas with small words like and, but, so. Put each idea in its own line or paragraph to make it easy to read.
structure
Add a short plan at the end or start. It helps the reader see what you want to do.
content
Kind and warm tone. You invite your friend to join.
content
You meet the task: say what sport to learn, how to learn, and you offer to do it together.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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