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Band 4

Some people consider price as the most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (medical treament). Do you agree or disagree?

Some
people
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 consider
price
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 as the most important thing to think about when buying
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product
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a product
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 (
such
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 as
cell
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a cell
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 phone) or
service
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a service
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 (medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree?
Price
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have
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has
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 always been a top priority for deciding
,
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apply
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whether
consumer
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a consumer
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 should buy the
product
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 or not. A lot of
companies
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 offer a promotion to
incentivize
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incentivise
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buyer
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buyers
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.
Sometime
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Sometimes
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 even leads to so called a
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price
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so-called price
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 war , meaning
companies
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 in the same field race to
discounting
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discount
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the
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apply
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price
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prices
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.
Some time
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Sometimes, it
 even
meaning
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means
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 losing profit. I agree that
price
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 is the most important factor when buying goods , we tend to compare
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price
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prices
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 from brand to brand rather than compare the
quality
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it self
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itself
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. It
come
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comes
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 to 3 reasons behind the psychology of
prioritizing
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prioritising
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price
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 rather than the value
it self
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itself
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.

Firstly
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 , the mindset of thinking that
quality
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 doesn’t matter than a massive
differences
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difference
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 in
price
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 , for some
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product
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products
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such
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 as oil ,
its
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it's
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 not much of a difference. If it still
serve
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serves
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it
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its
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 purpose
to
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for
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 cooking and
its
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it
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 doesn’t ruin the food.
Then
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 the
quality
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 is unnoticeable,
weather
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whether
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 the oil
coming
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comes
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 from Saudi
Arebia
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Arabia
, or
its
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it's
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 a Japanese oil . But in mass purchase ,
it
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there
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 may difference in
price
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for
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of
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 20% , which
is more
Verb problem
has a greater
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 impact
more
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apply
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than the
quality
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differece
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difference
it self
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itself
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.
Secondly
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 ,the thought of thinking that if they save the
price
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 on some particular big purchases ,
such
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 as
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car
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a car
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 . They could spend the money
the
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they
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 save
elsewhere
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,
such
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 as insurance
in addition
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 to the
car
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 or
car
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 modification tool kits
,
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.
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People
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 usually compare
this
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 thing
,
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:
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 Should they buy the
car
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in
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at
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 full
price
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 or the same
product
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 at
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discount
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a discount
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 and the ability to use
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discount
Correct article usage
the discount
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 money on something else
.
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?
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Thirdly
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, the psychology of thinking they
winning
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are winning
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 the company ,
people
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 like to win big
companies
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. Some
companies
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 have 90%
discount
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,
its
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it's
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very
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a very
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incentive
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good incentive
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 for
consumer
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consumers
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so
Punctuation problem
, so
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 they want to win the company , but
company
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the company
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 already
things
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thinks
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 it through
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discount
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the discount
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,
Punctuation problem
;
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 some
of
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apply
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product
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products
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 have
vey
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very
 high profit
margin
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margins
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. So even
90
Correct article usage
a 90
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%
discount
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 won’t do much of a pain to them. Some
people
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 know
this
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 , yet they treat it like a win. In conclusion, the reason why
people
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prioritize
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prioritise
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price
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than
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over
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 any
matter
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other matter
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 to decide on their own purchase
diction
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decision
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 usually
come
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comes
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to
Change preposition
down to
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 the psychology of
favoring
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favouring
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 the
price
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.

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structure
Make a clear plan. Start with a short intro, state your view, then give 2 or 3 reasons with examples. End with a simple conclusion.
grammar
Use short, clear sentences. Break long lines into small ones. Punctuate well.
lexis
Be precise with ideas. Say how price affects choice. Give specific, simple examples from real life.
accuracy
Check spelling and form. Fix errors like 'Arebia' to 'Arabia', 'weather' to 'whether', 'differece' to 'difference'.
content
You state a clear view in the opening.
structure
You use 'Firstly, Secondly, Thirdly' to show order.
content
You give some examples of price and buying.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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