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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Introduction
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modern life. Some
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 is the biggest part of
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the industry
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 in the world.
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 creates bad
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international
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 communities to vulume money
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 different cultures so it so easy to misunderstand each
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accidents
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the deaths of others
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Body · 2
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 the
others
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 hand, it is acceptable that international
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create
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 tension.
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, its advantages more
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 disadvantages because the exchange can be more
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valuable
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such
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 as learning new
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languages
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knowing how
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use new technologies,
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making new
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freinds
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friends
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meeting new
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people
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experiencing new
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things
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 that never met in your
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. It can improve
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the country
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country
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country's
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 business.
Conclusion
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 think the different
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cultures
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first
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 your mind
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different
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and balance
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the bad
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 in the future.

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structure
Plan your essay in a simple outline before you write. Say your view in the first paragraph and keep one idea in each paragraph.
coherence
Use small linking words to show how ideas fit together. Words like first, next, also, but, however help a lot.
content
Give one clear point to back each idea. If you can, give a short example from real life to show what you mean.
language
Check your spelling and grammar. Use short, clear sentences to avoid errors.
idea
The essay shows an attempt to discuss both sides.
organization
There is a basic essay shape with intro, body, and conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic growth
  • cultural exchange
  • misunderstandings
  • stereotypes
  • disrespectful
  • inappropriate
  • fostering understanding
  • appreciation
  • direct interactions
  • shared experiences
  • personal connections
  • promoting peace
  • global understanding
  • exposing individuals
  • preconceived notions
  • biases
  • cultural sensitivity training
  • community-driven tourism initiatives
  • responsible tourism
  • sustainable tourism practices
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