A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not well-managed.Does advantages outweigh disadvantages

The majority of the countries and cities these days completely depend on
profit
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from
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tourism
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the tourism
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industry. In my view
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the enhancements in infrastructure and the increase in slots for the job , downsides as instability and environmental damage caused by tourists are far more significant.
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with, there is an increase in
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of infrastructure, because
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will
more focus
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focus more
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on areas as airports, roads, public transport and etc. In order to attract more visitors to specific places and get the income from them, authorities will invest more money
on
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spheres than in any other. Take
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Phuket island
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as Phuket
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,
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the high influx of people in 2016, they expanded the airport, constructed more hotels, improved transportation facilities and more since that year. In most
of
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the
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places
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on
tourism
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, the education sector is usually low, which leads to
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of employment opportunities.Another benefit that
this
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trend brings is the creation of more job opportunities for locals. By the establishment of aforementioned hotels,
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community will be able to work there, even
with
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possessing
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academic qualifications or knowledge. In Phu
quoc
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Quoc
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, an island in
Vietnam
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Vietnam,
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where in 2015 the rates of employment and the average profit were minimal, the building of residential areas and apartments boosted each of the
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by 80
percent
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.
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,
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on the income collected from tourists
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to the inflexibility of
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the country’s
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economic
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which
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is far vital than any advantages. If there is no source of revenue other than
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tourism
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the tourism
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section
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, the country may face seasonal problems annually. As the flow of visitors ranges from month to month, the area may experience hard times
through
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the
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periods when there
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a
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few people
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to that region. In 2021,
for
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example
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almost all countries mostly dependent on
tourism
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have encountered economic crisis as routes were closed
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the virus.
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Also
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it is hard to control the movements of visitors and the harm that they
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cause
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to the visiting place. Usually, Individuals
traveling
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travelling
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to other parts of the world try to investigate that place, so they usually
oversee
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the issues they cause to the environment.
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, for the sake of investigating the area around, they cause pollution and overuse of water. To illustrate,
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Venice has struggled with overcrowding and environmental stress
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heavy
tourism
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. In conclusion, of
course
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this
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trend brings huge upgrades in infrastructure and rises opportunities for locals to get a job, but the downsides as inflexible economic and damage brought by
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tourists
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tourist
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tourist,
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are far greater.

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task response
Plan your essay. Start with a clear yes or no sentence on whether advantages outweigh disadvantages. Then write about both sides, then give your view.
coherence
Make each paragraph have one main idea and a short line to show how it connects to the last idea. Use linking words like 'first','next','but','however','for example'.
grammar
Use simple grammar. Check articles, plural s, and capital use. Fix big word spellings.
examples
Choose clear examples you know well. Say the place and year if you use it, and keep facts correct.
punctuation
Check punctuation. Use full stops and commas to separate ideas.
task response
Clear view on the topic and a stated position.
examples
Some good use of real world examples to support points.
structure
Overall idea flow is present, with an introduction and conclusion.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example
Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable tourism
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • hospitality industry
  • tourist influx
  • cultural commodification
  • ecological footprint
  • economic diversification
  • carrying capacity
  • cultural sensitivity
  • destination marketing
  • travel advisories
  • visitor management
  • impact assessment
  • tourism revenues
  • authentic experience
  • visitor satisfaction
  • conservation efforts
  • seasonal fluctuation
  • social sustainability
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