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Writing Samples
Band 1

Each year, the crime rate increases.What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal

It is
irrefuatble
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irrefutable
 that crime is burgeoning day by day in many countries.
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 are numerous
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reason
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reasons
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 behind
this
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 phenomenon and several ways to prevent it.
This
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 essay will discuss both reasons and solutions in the forthcoming paragraphs. To
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 with
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 reasons
that
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apply
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why
crime
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the crime
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 rate is increasing.The Primary reason is poverty
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due
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, due
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 to which individuals indulge
into
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in
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 criminal
activies
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activities
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for
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, for
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 instance , chain snatching , stealing money
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, etcertra
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etcertra
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etc
. So, these become the ways for them to earn the money and
completing
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 their basic needs. Sometimes unforeseen financial crises play
significant
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a significant
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 role in the rise of crime.
In addition
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 , unemployment is
major
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a major
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 concern.

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task response
The essay does not fully answer the task. It should clearly talk about both causes and how to stop crime with ideas that are easy to see.
structure
Make a short plan. Add an opening that states the main idea and finish with a clear ending.
content
Give clear reasons and one or two easy examples. Also add ideas on how to stop crime such as jobs, schooling, and help for poor people.
grammar
Check spell and word form. Use simple words. Read out loud to find mistakes.
coherence
Link ideas with simple joins like 'and', 'but', 'also', 'for example' to carry the flow.
content
The writer talks on a real problem.
structure
Some join words are used.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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