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The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph illustrates the number of
car
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theft
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thefts
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 in four different countries in the period of 1990 to 1999.
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, it can be seen that the highest level of
car
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 theft
experienced
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was experienced
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 in Great Britain throughout the period,
while
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 the remaining countries show
relatively
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a relatively
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fluctuative
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fluctuating
 trend.
Car
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 theft in Great Britain has
recorded
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been recorded
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 as the highest since 1990, the criminality stood at approximately 18
thefts
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 compared to a thousand vehicles being robbed and ended at around 17 records.
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in
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apply
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Britain shows
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a slightly
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slightly
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slight
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 fluctuation, it remains the highest figure. Followed by the crime records in Sweden,
car
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thefts
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 accounted for around 9
casualities
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casualties
 by 1990, and experienced
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a gradually
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gradually
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gradual
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 increase to
reached
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reach
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 its peak at almost 15 in 1999.
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, in France and Canada, the criminal activities reported as
similar
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a similar
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 pattern, which began at over 5 and approximately 8
thefts
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 respectively.
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, both trends ended at around 6
thefts
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at the end
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 of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, thefts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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