Because of traffic and housing problems in the cities, the government encourages business to move to the rural area. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

The government
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businesses to relocate from cities
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traffic congestion and high population density. I completely agree with the idea
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that
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support
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sustainability, human
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and environmental factors. If we consider
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intention of
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government
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we can easily see, they want
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environmental mitigation, degradation of natural resources and energy reduction.
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of all these problems is rapid population growth.
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However
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in the big
city
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city,
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have a lot of
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,
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job opportunities, good education,
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centers
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. These facts
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quit
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compelling for each
citizens
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.
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density problem
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true
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at the end
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of the
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individuals
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limited places
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also
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they use limited energy
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irresponsible
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.
In
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a
consequence
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the life quality became lower day by day. Recently I
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a documentary about Chinese life, the reason
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high
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the high
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population, most of the people live a limited
places
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, which they
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“capsule
home
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” with bad conditions. The government’s impact is very
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.
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, not only big cities face problems; rural areas
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as villages and small towns
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struggle with unemployment and a lack of facilities. If they could transform business to the rural places, they could solve two
problem
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at the same time. If businesses relocate to rural areas, a considerable number of city residents may
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move to villages and small towns in search of employment.
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strongly agree with
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the government’s
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idea, because they want to protect
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the environment
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and prevent unemployment.

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task
Plan your essay first. State your view in the first sentence and stay with it.
task
Make one main reason per paragraph and add a short, clear example.
coherence
Use simple, clear links between ideas to show how they connect.
lexical resource
Choose words carefully. Avoid long, hard phrases. Keep to common words.
gr
Check grammar and punctuation so sentences are easy to read.
content
You state a clear view and try to discuss both sides.
structure
The essay has a basic structure of intro, body, and conclusion.
content
There is an example about crowded living (capsule home).
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic diversification
  • infrastructure strain
  • rural character
  • urban decongestion
  • environmental impact
  • economic stimulation
  • logistical challenges
  • commuting
  • work-life balance
  • cultural clashes
  • habitat destruction
  • rural depopulation
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