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Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner. Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter - say how long you now want to rent the apartment for - explain why your plans have changed - tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing with my gratitude
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 a discussion with you for my personal reason, which is about renewing the agreement of rent. I have been living here for five months, and my contract will expire in
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 month
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 I wish to extend it to stay longer, it will be around
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 more year The reason why I need to extend my agreement is
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 I
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 to study
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 more
PhD
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 at Bond University. As I mentioned, I have been residing here for a long
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, the condition of your apartment is great
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 suitable for me.
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, there is a problem I must let you know. I believe
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 of the pipes above my room is broken, because I can hear a sound
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uses
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 the sink
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 you ask a plumber to repair it in future? Thank you for your time and consideration
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 hope to hear from you soon. Yours sincerely Chris

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Task Response
Be clear about how long you want to rent for and give an exact date or length (for example, for 12 more months from now).
Coherence
Break the letter into clear parts: one paragraph for purpose, one for reasons, one for the problem, and a closing request.
Language Use
Fix grammar and use simple, common words. For example: change 'I am writing with my gratitude' to 'I am writing to discuss renewing the lease'.
tone
Polite and formal tone throughout.
content
States reason and problem clearly.
structure
Uses a proper closing formula.
The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lease extension
  • rent renewal
  • tenancy agreement
  • extend contract
  • residential term
  • currently residing
  • plan adjustment
  • maintenance issue
  • residential upkeep
  • repair request
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