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Is technology limiting creativity? Discuss your opinion

Nowadays,
technology
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 is
backbone
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the backbone
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 for every nation. Owing to
this
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,
technology
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have
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has
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 many
benifits
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benefits
 but
also
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 some limitations. In
upcoming
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the upcoming
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paragraphs
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paragraphs,
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i
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I
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 will discuss how
its
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it's
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 limiting
to
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apply
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creativity in several ways. To
inaugurate
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begin
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 with,
everyday
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every day
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 new
technology
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 is
launch
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launched
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, which
is affected
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affects
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 our future generations.
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, in modern
society
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society,
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 everyone uses a
mobilephone
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mobile phone
 and
busy
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busies
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 themselves by playing games alone. Before all children get together and play in
playground
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the playground
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 and they learn teamwork, time management
and
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, and
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to
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how to
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 communicate. By doing activities
together
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together,
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 they
begin
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become
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 more creative and active.
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 from
this
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, before nobody
utilise
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used
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printer
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a printer
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 to print
image
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images
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; instead
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instead
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instead,
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 they
were make
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made
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sketch
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sketches
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 by their own creativity. In recent research in
Malaysia
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Malaysia,
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 they found
the
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that
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children's
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children
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 who use more
technology
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 gadgets are less creative and active as well. As compared to other youngster who complete their jobs without any support of
technology
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.
On the other hand
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,
technology
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 is in every nook and corner. In
mondern
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modern
days
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days,
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 everything
is depend
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depends
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 on machinery
from
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, from
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 making small
chip
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chips
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 to cars and rockets. One
side
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hand
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, its
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its
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it
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gaves
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gives
 us
lot
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a lot
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 of advantages
including
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, including
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 time saving and cost
effective
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effectiveness
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 as well.
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, with the use of
technology
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 astronaut successfully landed on
moon
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the moon
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.
Furthermore
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,
technology
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 is
also
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 helpful in medical research. In
past
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the past
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year
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year,
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russia
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Russia
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 found
successfully
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apply
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medicine for HIV and cancer
.
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successfully.
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Its
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It's
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 all possible
due to
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 modern
technology
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. In
the
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a
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 nutshell, whether
technology
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effects
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affects
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 the modern
generation
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generation's
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 creativity and
limiting
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limits
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 their ability to grow.
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,
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apply
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 it has some advantages in
medical
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the medical
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 sector and space as well. Whether it
is depend
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depends
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upon
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on
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 person to person
how
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on how
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 they use it. At
last
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its work
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it's
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as
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a
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two headed
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two-headed
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 coin which
have
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has
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 different perspectives.

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task response
Your view in the topic is not clear in the start and end. Say your own opinion clearly in the first part and say it again at the end.
task response
Make each paragraph have one main idea. Start with a short line that shows this idea, then add support.
coherence
Use easy join words like and, but, also, then to show how ideas go together.
language simple
Use short, clear sentences. Check spelling and form of words.
content
There is a idea that tech can both help and slow art.
structure
The writer tries to use both sides of the view.
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