Some people believe that teaching children at home is the best for a children's development while others think it is important for children to go to school. Discuss both advantages of each method and give your own opinion.

There is an ongoing debate among parents and teachers to determine if the best
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of education is
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home schooling
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or attending
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with other students. In my opinion, each
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has different needs
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others
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, others
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may not
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I believe that as
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grow
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preferences
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public schooling or
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schooling may change. In
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I will highlight the
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of each
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of education.
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schooling requires a parent
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has experience, a background in teaching and plenty of time during the day to spend with their
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.
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method
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ensures that the
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gets the full attention of their teacher, they can work on their own pace and pursue the things they excel at more deeply
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as sports , art , math or languages. Many
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athletes
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home schooled
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gave them the opportunity to have a more flexible schedule and more time to invest in preparing for their future
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method
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creates deeper relationships between the parent and
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.
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,
children
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with special needs, autism, disabilities and illnesses may find it difficult to attend
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daily and
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benefit
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from a
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environment for learning. Public and private
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school
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are the most common methods of education among
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around the world. Students attending
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with other
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benefit
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from having a regular schedule of attending everyday lessons, exams throughout the year to assess their knowledge,
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with other students and participating in
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functions.
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, making friends and learning to work together
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an extremely important
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in life.
Children
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who have parents
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work during the week
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from going to
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rather than
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home schooling
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.
School
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can become a fun experience for them as they make
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memories and friendships during their time there.

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structure
Add a clear final paragraph that restates your view and sums up key points.
coherence
Link ideas with simple, clear words and use connectors to show how items are related.
content
Give more examples for both sides to show depth.
grammar
Watch punctuation and break long sentences into shorter ones.
task
You show a clear view from the start and keep to two sides of the topic.
content
You give some real examples like athletes who were home schooled.
coherence
Two main ideas are in two paragraphs, which helps the reader.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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