The graph below presents the employment patterns in the USA between 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below provides key information about the employment patterns in the USA from 1930 to 2010.
This
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includes six parts ,
such
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as industrial, sales and office, farming, technical and other services. The value is measured in numbers. The parts are determined by colours.
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, all of them have significant changes.
Overall
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, the highest alternation increased in farming in the primary years.
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, the lowest alternation decreased in the final years. Both of them have important features.
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one hand, in terms of the
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greatest
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changes, in the first year, in 1930,
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farming increased by almost 75.
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it was decreased gradually from 1940 to 2010.
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, other services and technical increased dramatically from 1930 to 1940,
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almost 10.
On the other hand
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, in terms of the lowest changes, in the end year, in 2010, the farming decreased sharply,
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0.
However
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, the industrial and technical parts increased significantly from 1990 to 2010.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment patterns
  • industrial sector
  • agricultural sector
  • service sector
  • figures
  • percentages
  • trends
  • decreasing trend
  • increasing trend
  • significant growth
  • considerable decline
  • expansion
  • analyze
  • observations
  • key periods
  • transitions
  • conclusion
  • economy
  • shifted focus
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