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The graph below shows UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tones, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph illustrates four different
sectors
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 of acid rain emission in the UK, expressed in millions of
tons
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 from 1990 to 2007.
Overall
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, all types of
sectors
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 experienced different trends in the time period.
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 electricity, gas supply, domestic, and other industries declined, the transportation sector rose . Regarding 1990 , the measurement of gas and water supply constituted approximately 3.5
tons
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 and held the highest point .
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 ,
this
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 statistic declined significantly in 1997 and lost 2
tons
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. From 1997 to 2003, it changed rapidly , and
finally
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 in 2007, the dimensions of electricity, gas and water supply constituted about 0.5
tons
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. Notably,
this
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 figure lost 3
tons
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 over the time period. Other types of industries started with 2
tons
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 in 1990 and decreased consistently to 2007 , which ranged between 1 and 1.5
tons
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. Obviously,
this
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figure
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The figure
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 lost half of its measurement.
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, transport , communication , and domestic
sectors
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 began with 0.5
tons
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 in 1990. Both figures changed rapidly.
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 the transport and communication
sectors
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 increased , the domestic sector declined consistently .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sectors, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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