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The typical teaching situation of a teacher and students in the class will not exist by the year 2050. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, the
situation
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 in education is changing
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. The typical teaching
situation
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 of a teacher and
students
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 in the class will not exist by the year 2050. I personally agree with
this
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 statement. First of all, I think that one of the
resons
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reasons
 why the
situation
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 will change by the year 2050 is because of
technology
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 improvement.
The Covid
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 in 2019 is a good example.
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 it was
an
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a
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 big issue at that time, the
situation
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 had shown that people can work
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well
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 online. The same
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can
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 about
students
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. Now there
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are
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 a lot of types of online education
when
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where
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students
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 don'
t
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 even know
how
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what
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 their teacher looks like
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, and
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 it's not the same aura
like
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as
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 in
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class. The second
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reason
 why I
belive
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believe
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 that the old teaching process won'
t
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 exist is because of
new
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the new
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 generation. The improvement of technologies won'
t
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 stop, they
wiil
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will
 be better every day, every month and every year. So as far
it
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as it
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 is going,
than
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then
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 more humans will
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be used
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 to
new
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the new
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life style
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lifestyle
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.
New
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 generation won'
t
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 imagine other ways of study
exept
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except
 online, and it
depenns
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depends
 on
time
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the time
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 when the old education style will
dissepear
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disappear
.
Majority
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 think that the typical teaching in classes will never
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go away
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, because it's
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a clasic
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clasic
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classic
 style of
studing
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studying
, when teachers are
together with
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students
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. Despite the fact that there are a lot of components which
showing
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show
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 that the
changings
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changes
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 will be, some people
belive
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believe
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 that the future won'
t
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 change. In conclusion, I can say that,
although
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 there are still people who hope that the teaching process between teachers and
students
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 will be the same, in my opinion, the world won'
t
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 be the same in 24 years.

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structure
Your view is clear but the plan feels loose. Make a simple plan before you write: one idea per paragraph, and one link word to move to the next idea.
content
Give more proof for your ideas. Use small facts or clear examples that fit the point you make.
language
Work on spelling and small grammar mistakes to help the reader see your point.
content
You tell the reader you agree with the statement at the start.
structure
The essay has a clear end paragraph.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology advancements
  • virtual learning
  • online education
  • individualized learning
  • personalized learning
  • facilitative role
  • collaborative learning
  • evolve
  • adapt
  • social interaction
  • communication skills
  • teacher-student relationships
  • flexible learning
  • lifelong learning
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