The pie charts show energy sources in Australia in 2008 and predictions for 2030.

The pie charts illustrate the distribution of different
energy
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sources in Australia in 2008 and
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the expected
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future changes in 2030.
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, fossil fuels remain dominant in both charts.
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, the usage of coal is projected to decline,
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proportion of gas and oil is expected to increase
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.
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, geothermal
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is
also
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predicted to appear as a new
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source in 2030.
Three
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The three
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largest sources of
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such
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as coal, gas and
oil
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oil,
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were the most popular resources in Australia in 2008
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39%, 22.9% and 32.5% respectively. They are expected to remain the main sources of
energy
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in
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2030,
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with some noticeable changes in their distribution.
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the consumption of coal is predicted to decline by more than 10%, gas is expected to rise significantly by 10%. Oil, in its turn, will be used just a couple
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of percent
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percent
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more than in 2008. It is expected to
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the new
energy
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source, namely geothermal
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,
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solar
energy
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is no longer presented on the future chart. The usage of other options of
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resources will
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be slightly increased.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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