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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The
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 below depicts the manufacturing of milk yearly in four countries
within
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over
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 three years.
Overall
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, it is evident that the Netherlands has the most dominant amount of milk within the time frame,
whereas
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 Guatemala has the least
amounts
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amount
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 of milk.
Firstly
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, the Netherlands had a fluctuating figure
through
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 the
table
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. They began at 11,262,000
litres
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 in the first
year
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, but had
slight
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a slight
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 deduction of roughly 100,000
litres
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 in the
second
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year
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.
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, in 2010 they had an increase of about 300,000
which
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, which
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estimated
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is estimated
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 to
11,466,000
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be 11,466,000
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litres
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.
Secondly
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, Australia started off well at about 11,246,000
litres
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but
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, similar to
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the Netherlands
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Netherlands
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Netherlands,
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 they decreased slightly in the
second
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year
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 to 11,105,000
litres
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 and even
further
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 depreciated in the final
year
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 to 9,165,000
litres
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. Tanzania is third on
this
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 list, and they have a great development in the
table
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 as they increased
through out
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throughout
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.
This
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 country began at 87,000
liters
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litres
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 in the first
year
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 to rise up to 1,42,000 in the
second
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year
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 and even
further
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 progressed to 1,55,000
litres
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 in the final
year
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.
Finally
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, Guatemala
the
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, the
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 lowest on the
list
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list,
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 has
similar
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a similar
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 pattern to Tanzania as it progresses in the
table
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. In 1990, they estimated 26,000
liters
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litres
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 and progressed
further
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 to 55,000 in the
second
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year
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 and
finally
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at
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to
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 84,000
liters
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litres
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 in 2010.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally, further".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words table, litres, year, second with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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