some people believe that social media plays an important role in our lives. Some say that social media is not important to our lives..... discuss both these views and give your opinion.

In recent times, social
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has made
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remarkable progress
especially
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, especially
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in modern societies. Some
people
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argue that it is an indispensable part of
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's life,
whereas
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others contend that it has some
negatives
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negative
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consequences and
not
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is not
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relevant to the individuals.
However
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, I personally believe that it has both countless benefits
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such
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as convenience and instant information and disadvantages
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will be substantiated in
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paragraph. On the one hand, it is believed that
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social
media
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is overly convenient and
also
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provides
immediate
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immediate,
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profound knowledge.
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, individuals can
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easily
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connect
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with their loved ones
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, which
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assist
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helps
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them
to
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maintain their real-life relationships even from the comfort of their homes.
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, during COVID-19, when lockdown was imposed everywhere
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people
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were restricted to stay inside,
people
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were still able to communicate with their family members and relatives sitting beyond international boundaries.
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, social
media
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proved as a lifeline
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that pandemic.
Moreover
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, valuable information and enormous data can be obtained instantly
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at
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fingertips
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the fingertips
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.
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for
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instance, if any disaster can be seen in any country, social
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has
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the ultimate
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power to spread
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the news widely on
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a global
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level.
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, despite having significant advantages, its negative impacts on
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society cannot be overlooked.
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its numerous repercussions on
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health,
people
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generally
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a devil
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into
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their own lives. Prolonged screen
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can cause impaired
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, obesity and several health issues
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, which
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can
further
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take
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people
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on
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the brink of destruction.
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of doing physical activities, even
children
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spend excessive
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while
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using their electronic gadgets
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, which
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impacts
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their physical
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and mental ability as well.
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, with the advent of PS5, most of the
time
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children
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use to spend in front of their screens
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, which
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causes obesity since it is a sedentary activity.
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,
this
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may highly impact their harmonious relationships if they
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not
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able to devote their quality
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to their near and dear ones.
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,
children
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usually waste their
time
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on social
media
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instead
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of limited use. In conclusion,
although
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it is tremendously beneficial for
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individuals
due to
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its convenience and providing instant information,
but
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it is
also
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quite detrimental
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people
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's health and
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their relationships as well. In my opinion, it is best to adopt a balanced approach
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firstly
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, parents should limit their
children
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's mobile phone usage and adjust their timings sagaciously and no over-reliance on social
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. In order to harness the benefits of social
media
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,
people
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must take some prudent steps in their lives.

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task
Plan your essay. Start with a clear answer. State your view in the last part of the intro and in the end.
coherence
Make each paragraph have one main idea. Use a clear topic sentence. Use linking words to show the order.
task
Give more strong examples. Explain why each view matters. Use simple words and keep close to the task.
content
You show both sides and give your own view.
example
You use a real example (COVID-19) to back up your point.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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