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The maps show the changes that happened to an island called Paradise

The maps provide key information about an island ،named
paradise
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Paradise
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from
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, from
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past
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the past
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 to the present.
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Overall
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Overall,
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 it is clear from the older map
,
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apply
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That
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that
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 the island had few services .
In
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addition
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addition,
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 it wasn’t divided into specific facilities ,
whereas
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 the new plan is modern
and
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apply
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and has multiple spaces.
,
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apply
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According to
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 what it’s
shown
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shown,
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 there was a scientific research station in the middle. If you come from the west
side
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side,
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 there was a pear and a boat next to it ,
also
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, the island consisted of a natural spring
in
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on
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 the east side In terms of the current plan,
there
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There
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are changes to several facilities.
on
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On
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 the west side, the
pear
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pier
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 has expanded, and the boat has been replaced by a cruise ship.
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Also
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Also,
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 trees in the middle have been removed
and
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, and
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 there is a swimming pool,
open
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an open
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 restaurant ,
BBQ
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a BBQ
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 area and a hotel have been added, and the scientific research station has
removed
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been removed
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.
In addition
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, the facilities are divided by the cycle path
and
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, and
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 the natural spring has not changed.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, in addition".
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "divided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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