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Traveling in groups with a tour guide is the best way to travel. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people argue that
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going on a
trip
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 with
the
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a
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tour
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 guide can make your
trip
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 more enjoyable
and
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, and
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 they believe
,
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that, tour
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tour
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 is the best way to
travel
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, in
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. In
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this
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essay
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essay,
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i
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I
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 will
say
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share
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 my opinion about
this
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 phenomenon and explain it. First , when someone joins a guided
tour
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, that means he/she will
travel
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 with a
group
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 of different people
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such
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, such
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 as young , friendly , old ,
stressed
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and stressed
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 , and
he
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they
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 should expect all of the aspects .
Furthermore
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,
It
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it
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 may be very fun to
travel
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and
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, and
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then
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 they can make your best
travel
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 .
on
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On
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 the other
side
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hand
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,
traveling
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travelling
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 with a
tour
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 guide can help you a lot in your
trip
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,
for
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instance
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instance,
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 they suggest the best places in the town , the best restaurants ,
famous
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and famous
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 shopping
centers
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centres
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.
On the other hand
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 ,
traveling
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travelling
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 with a
group
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 can limit you in the
trip
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 ,
for
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example
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 you should always be with your
group
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 , you must obey their orders
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such
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, such
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 as waking up early!
and
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And
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also
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your
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you're
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 not allowed to spend time by yourself
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, and
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 maybe
some times
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sometimes
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 you should follow them to go somewhere
but
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, but
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 you do not like that place.
To conclude
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 ,
i
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I
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 would say
,
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apply
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traveling
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travelling
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 with a
group
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 or
tour
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 guide
is
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apply
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depends on the personality
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. For
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for
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instance
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instance,
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 some one
introvert
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introverted
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 doesn’t like to be with a
group
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 and
prefer
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prefers
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 to be alone , but in person , when
i
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I
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 want to
travel
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 to a new place ,
i
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I
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 prefer to go
by
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on
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 a
tour
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 so
i
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I
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dont
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don't
 get lost.

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task
State your view clearly in the opening. Say if you agree or disagree in one clear sentence.
coherence
Use simple links to show how your ideas connect. Phrases like and, but, so, also can help.
coherence
Make each paragraph have one main idea. Start with a topic sentence and stay on that idea.
grammar
Use short, clear sentences. Check for mistakes to make your meaning easy.
content
Give one clear example to back up each point.
strength
The essay tries to discuss both sides of the issue.
strength
There is an introduction and a conclusion in the text.
strength
The words are simple and easy to read.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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