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Band 3

Some people think that the modern communication tech nology is having a negative effect on social relationships. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

At the present
time
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, there are many
application
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applications
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 which
people
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 can communicate remotely through their smartphones. Personally, I strongly disagree with
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 statement, which shows only
negative
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the negative
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 side of using modern
technology
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 in
term
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 of communication.
This
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reasons
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the reasons
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 why
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technology
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 should be engaged. On one hand, Many
organizations
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organisations
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 require that all employees
should
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complete their work on
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 ;
therefore
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,
Supervisor
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supervisors
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 can assign work immediately through smartphones
which
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, which
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help
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helps
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 them communicate
to
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with
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 their employees in
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.
From
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this
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 reason, it can display how
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the convenince
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convenince
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convenience
 of
communicattion
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communication
 can boost
an
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effectiveness in the workplace.
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,
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if
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 any
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 occurs suddenly,
people
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 can call
help
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for help
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 immediately. So help can come in
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 before
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the worse
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worse
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worst
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 thing
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happens
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. Another example is
people
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 can reach out
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to whom
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whom
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those
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 they love
;
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,
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 even though
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apply
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 they live far away
each
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from each
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 other.
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Student
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students
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in
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abroad can talk to their friends or their parents in their home country.
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,
people
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 can be aware
a
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of a
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situation around the world through reading or watching news on
a
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apply
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social media.
To conclude
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there
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 are more advantages than disadvantages of using modern
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 for communication
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such
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, such
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 as working,
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accuracy
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, and talking to whoever
in
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at
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long
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a long
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 distance.
Technology
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 is a tool to comfort
people
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 in life. There are only
few
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a few
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 disadvantages if we use modern
technology
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 appropriately.

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Your view is clear, but give more detail on why you feel this way.
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Fix big grammar and spelling mistakes to help readers understand your ideas.
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Use simple, common words and short sentences so errors are fewer.
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Put each main idea in its own paragraph and end the paragraph with a small point.
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Include a fair view too, even a short part, to show balance.
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Use more examples or clear facts to back up each idea.
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Finish with a simple, strong ending that restates your view.
Strength
The stance is clear from the start.
Strength
You use examples from work, help in danger, and distance to back your point.
Strength
There is a full ending sentence.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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