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The pie charts compare the percentage contribution of different sectors to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016.

The pie charts delineate information regarding the contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016
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with the help of various sectors, namely Healthcare,
Trade
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,
Finance
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, Business, Leisure and Hospitality, Government,
Agriculture
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,
Construction
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 and Manufacturing. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that
Agriculture
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 shared the largest proportion,
while
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 the
construction
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 industry showed the least rate in 2000. In the meantime,
Trade
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 and Transportation illustrated as the most dominant
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, which
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 contributed to the
economy
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 growth,
whereas
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,
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finance
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 and business had the smallest revenue for a thriving economy.
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the agriculture
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agriculture
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 field accounted for almost one quarter of the whole turnover. Intriguingly, 17% of
transaction
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transactions
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generated
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were generated
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 from
Leisure
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the Leisure
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 and Healthcare
segments
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segments,
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 followed by
Trade
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, Government
making
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, making
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14
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14%
 and 12%, respectively. Manufacturing,
Finance
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 and
Construction
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 comprised only 8,5 and 3%
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subsequently
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respectively
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which
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, which
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 were the lowest
number
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 among all divisions.
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with
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 2016,
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the Agriculture
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Agriculture
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 area exhibited a notable decrease
contributing
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, contributing
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 14% of the total earnings
which
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, which
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 was the same
with
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as
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 the Leisure and Hospitality
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sector, however
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,
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however
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, the focus changed from
agriculture
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 to
the
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healthcare and education
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,
constituted
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which constituted
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 17%. In the second term of the period,
trade
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,
construction
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 and manufacturing businesses represented 16, 12 and 10%, respectively.
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,
Finance
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 exhibited 8% as the least beneficial between
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the given
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 sectors
and
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, and
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government
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the government
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 pattern displayed a slight decrease and formed 9% of the total percentage in 2016.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words trade, finance, agriculture, construction with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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