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Band 4

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

It is undoubtedly the case that the ownership of cars has
boosted
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increased
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 over the past thirty years.
Due to
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this
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 change in numerous cities world suffer
for
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from
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 traffic overload. There are several reasons for
this
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 problem, and various measures could be taken by the government and public to improve the situation. There are two main factors that have led to the rise in traffic. On the major causes in
that
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the
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automobiles
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reason automobiles
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 became affordable
mostly
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apply
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for everyone.
This
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 means that as many adults live in the city as many cars
there
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apply
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will be used.
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,
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one
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a
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 family having two kids over eighteen may have four cars.
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, nowadays prices
varies
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vary
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 in
wide
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a wide
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 range from 1,000 euros to thousands.
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Therefore
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Therefore,
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 people may
safe
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save
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 money or take
o
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out
loan
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a loan
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.
Secondly
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,
cities
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cities'
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 expansion has contributed significantly to
this
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 issue.
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, the distances between home and work have lengthened. So
that
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apply
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people tend to choose comfortable transport.
As a result
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, cities became crowded
of
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with
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 automobiles. There are several actions that the government could take to solve the problem described above.
Firstly
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,
one
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 of the
solution
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solutions
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 would
to
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be to
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 generate more convenient public transport.
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, there should be more discounts for
traveling
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travelling
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 on
bus
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the bus
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.
Also
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, the city should have bikes for rent
with
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at
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 reasonable prices. The second measure would be
restriction
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restrictions
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 for families. An example of
this
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 is that
one
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 family must have only
one
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 transport
mean
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apply
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.
Finally
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, it will allow
to
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us to
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 reduce pollution. In conclusion, despite some obvious reasons, various measures can be taken to tackle the problem of traffic
jam
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jams
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.
While
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 it may not be possible to find an absolute solution, any action should probably still involve the government and each person.

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grammar
Improve grammar and word use to make sentences clear.
coherence
Use clear topic sentences in each paragraph and link ideas with simple words.
content
Add more full examples and facts that fit the task.
grammar
Check spelling and verb forms to avoid mistakes.
structure
Good plan with introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence
Some link words used to show cause and effect.
lexical
Uses easy and common words.
Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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